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中考英语作文精选题目解析(二)

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、上海市

(一)2019年

【文段表达】

Write at least 60words according to the given information(根据以下材料,写一篇不少于写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格。)

以下是几位同学在以貌取人,盲从朋友,看待谎言,抉择人生等方面的感悟。请从中选择你比较感兴趣的一条,可结合自己的经历,谈谈你的体会。

Don’t judge peopleby their looks. Someone could be bad-looking and still be nice. —Katie

When your frienddoes something stupid, you don't need to follow. —Jackie

Don’t tell ateacher your dog ate your homework, especially if you don’t have a dog. —Alex

Life is like a“choose your own ending” book-you can take whatever adventure you want. — Sally

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【考题解析】

2019年上海作文题和以往的出题思路大有不同,让同学们在同一份试卷的阅读篇目中,选择一个主题结合自身实例来写一篇文章。出题思路新颖,角度多样化,学生有了更大选择空间和思考空间,可以说是一次独特的作文命题。分析这十几年来的英语作文题目的变化,可以看到形式虽然变了,主题也从关注自我的生活经历到思考个人素养,社会和谐,简言之:从“自我”到“超我”的转变。

从作文题目可以看出话题选择多,同学们需要排除干扰,快速确定一个话题,然后围绕这个话题去思考是很重要的。确定话题后,注意审题,要结合自己的情况进行表达,可以列举自己身上的或自己遇到小事例进行说明,采用夹叙夹议的方式来写出这篇作文。

【满分范文】

Don’t judge a bookby its cover

Many people, sometimes myself included, tendto judge a person by his appearances.

I was afraid of my uncle who has a scaredtattoo on his arm till my mother told me a “story”. When I was a three-year-oldnaught boy, I always ran around the neighborhood with my toy saber.Unfortunately, one day I hit a wild dog by accident. The dog became crazy andtried to bite me. It was that time my uncle appeared and protected me with hisstrong arm. However, this accident left a scar on his arm. My uncle went to geta tattoo in order to cover up the scars. From that moment, he is my hero instead of a bad looking uncle.

So we need to go beyond people’s looks andfocus on more internal spirits in order to truly judge a person.

【名师点评】

这篇作文要求选择一个主题,结合自身经历来写一篇文章,题目形式新颖,看似无从下手,难度较高。但是认真审题之后会发现这四个选题与生活息息相关,都是生活中会遇到的事情,“以貌取人,盲从朋友,看待谎言,抉择人生”都是一些生活感悟。这就需要同学们结合自身经历,展开思考,选择积极的价值取向来写这篇作文。故本文的体裁与前三年的一致,为“夹叙夹议”。

这篇作文的框架为三段式,第一段点题,表明自己所选的主题,引出下文要讲述的生活实例。第二段具体描述生活实例的发展过程,事例要求完整,表达逻辑清楚,层次分明,不要流水账式的叙述,或者使得人摸不着头脑,不知所云。注意是讲述已经发生过的生活事件,所以应采用一般过去时。第三段,引出感悟,升华文章主旨。写作时应注意使用一些具有亮点的词汇和句子,为文章增添色彩,突显自己的写作水平,其次注意语句之间使用恰当的连接成分,使文意上下连贯,表达流畅。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇优秀且能打动人的的作文,短文作者根据题目要求,选取了主题“不以貌取人”表现了作者积极的人生观和价值取向。

短文有以下几个优点:首先文章内容完整,思路清晰,符合题目要求。第一段用一句话简单引出话题说明生活中存在一些以貌取人的不好现象,自己也曾以貌取人,引发大家的思考,使读者对下文产生好奇。第二段作者主要讲述了发生在自己身上的一件事情。作者第一句交代了事件的大概,“I was afraid of my uncle who has a scared tattoo on his arm”由自己叔叔胳膊上的一块伤疤,吸引读者眼球,接着又用妈妈告诉自己的一个故事为下文埋下伏笔。接着就阐述了时间发生的具体过程,满足大家的好奇心,内容层次清楚,表现了作者较强的逻辑结构。作者用时间状语从句“When I was a three-year-old naught boy, I always ran around theneighborhood with my toy saber. ”交代了事件发生的事件地点,时间是在自己三岁的时候,地点是在街区。另外作者只用了简单的副词“Unfortunately”,连词“However”短语“From that moment”就使得整个事件结构清楚,可谓基本功扎实。第三段用So引出结论,表明观点,升华文章的主题。

(二)2018年

【文段表达】

Write at least 60 words on the topic "My progress" (以"进步了"为题,写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格。)

你在生活或学习中一定取得过不少进步,比如生活技能的获得、学习方法的掌握、良好习慣的养成。请选取其中一个方面,结合自身经历,谈一谈你是如何取得这一进步的。

注意:短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分。

The following isfor reference only (以下表达仅供参考)

used to do/be…trymy best to do…make progress in( doing)…

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【考题解析】

2018年上海卷中考作文仍沿袭近几年中考作文命题的趋势,关注自我成长,仍然从第一人称"我"出发,考题十分贴近学生的成长经历和真实情感。写作主题突出传递正能量,力求学生发现生活中积极的一面,考察学生用英语表达自己思想的能力。相较过去,我有什么进步?"My progress"可以是学习生活技能上的,也可以是个人习惯上的,学生需思考自身通过怎样的努力实现了自我的进步与成长。

【满分范文】

I used to write badly, especially in English.It affected my performance every composition. I felt annoyed because I didn’tknow how to do it.

Several months ago, our English teacherreminded us to pay attention to our English Writing. He prepared a copybook foreach student. We were asked to practice every day. I tried my best to copywell. The teacher encouraged me and kept on telling me what to do next. Withthe help of my English teacher, I made progress in writing.

No pains no gains. I will study hard toachieve greater progress and I believe I will do better and better.

【名师点评】

本文属于写人叙事类话题类作文,话题是"My progress"。主要根据自身的经历,谈谈如何取得进步的,具体内容可以围绕生活技能的获得、学习方法的掌握、良好习慣的养成方面去写。所给范文写了自己在"英语书写"方面的进步,人称是第一人称,讲述的是已经发生的事情,所以用一般过去时,在文章结尾作者表达自己以后会更加努力,取得更大的进步,所以用一般将来时。全文采用"What—How—Conclusion"的三步写作思路来完成,条理清楚,结构完整,语言简洁明了。

本文第一段作者先引出话题,说自己在书写方面做的不好,但自己不知如何改进,"I felt annoyed because I didn’t know how todo it. "为下文自己在书写方面的进步作出铺垫,思路清晰。第二段主要叙述了自己是如何取得进步的过程。几个月前,在英语老师的帮助下,自己取得了很大的进步,交代清楚了事情发生的时间,人物,经过,结果符合叙事类作文的基本要点。作者采用时间状语Several months ago,动词短语pay attention to,介词短语With the help of 简要清楚地表达了自己进步的经历,语言朴实无华,却能阐明事情的经过。第三段主要是升华主题,表达自己在未来会更加努力学习,取得更大的进步," I will study hard to achieve greater progress and I believe I willdo better and better."。谚语"No pains no gains."使用恰当准确,为文章在结尾添彩。

本文的体裁为议论文,根据所给图片和提示可知,文章要求介绍图中的两个主人公在做什么?其次谈论当你看到人们像这样扔垃圾时你怎么做?以及为什么这么做的理由。描述图片内容,男人的行为和女士的说话内容概括,要注意用现在进行时态。叙述当你看到这种行为该怎么做,写出自己的建议和做法,并陈述理由。这是文章详写的部分,引入到环保的话题中。本文涵盖了材料中的所有内容,行文流畅,合理运用恰当的连接词,逻辑思路清晰。

(三)2017年

【文段表达】

Write at least 60words on the topic “There’s always hope”(以“常怀希望”为题,写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格)

面临困惑的时候、经历变化的时候、感觉挫败的时候、遭遇逆境的时候……来自内心的坚持、他人的帮助、社会的关爱和科技的发展等,总能让人常怀希望。请选取一个方面谈谈你的理解(可结合自身或他人的经历)。

The following isfor reference only (以下表达仅供参考)

l get out ofdifficulty

l give … a hand

l never lose hope

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【考题解析】

2017年的中考英语作文要求考生围绕“希望”这个话题,以《常怀希望》为题目写一篇考场作文,初看似曾相识,但其涉及的内容非常广泛,其实本类型的考题可以归为“励志类”作文。对于正在成长的希望少年们,hope是绝对的正能量,传递积极正面的 “never give up” 精神。学生可结合自身的经历,表达自己在学习或生活中的感悟。写作主题突出传递正能量,更主要的是考查了学生用英语表达自己思想的能力。学生可以选择一个角度完成写作,如自己内心的坚持、旁人的无私帮助、社会各方面的关爱等确定短文的体裁和表达的中心。从历年上海中考英语作文题目可以看出,出题形式还是很有规律的,多为半命题或全命题,不论何种体裁,内容都是以“I”为主体,强调“我”,即个体的能动性,给中学生传达相当强的正能量和积极向上的一面。学生在写作时可以列提纲,因为此类文章采取“三段式”写作最为清晰明朗。首段,引出话题和主旨在作文时,中间段,举出自己所经历的具体事例;末段,总结全篇,前后呼应。写作时要注意上下文的衔接过渡,适当地使用些高级词汇及句式,给文章增添些许亮色。

【满分范文】

There’s always hope

There’s no doubt that life is full ofdifficulties. However, just as the saying goes that when god closes a door, heopens a window.

It was really a hard time for me to preparefor the entrance exam, I met with a lot of difficulties, especially physics. Infact, I used to lose confidence in this subject for several low marks.Fortunately, at this time, my teacher told me that I could surely make it inthe end. It was her encouragement that made me make up my mind to learn physicswith great efforts. Difficult as it was, I have never given up since then.

Where there’s a will, there’s a way! As longas we never give up, there’s always hope.

【名师点评】

本文作者能够认真审题,看清楚所给作文题目所表达的含义,抓住关两个关键词:“hope”, ”always”紧扣主题。作者采用第一人称,时态采用一般现在时和一般过去时。首段运用一般现在时,引出话题和主旨,“There’s no doubt that life is full ofdifficulties”说明生活中总是充满困难,并引用谚语为文章首段增添了文采,第二段作者主要运用了一般过去时,描述了自己在准备试时遇到困难,老师鼓励他,使他下定决心去努力学习,最终在逆境之中获取胜利与成长的。第三段运用了一般现在时总结全文,前后呼应,引用谚语,进一步提高了文章的文采。

【写作亮点】

本文采用各种表示因果关系和递进关系的连词,如:in that, for the sake of, on all accounts等,是文章条理清楚,更具有逻辑性。其次海应用了大量的词组,如:be supposed to, tend to, face up to, spare no effort to等为文章增添了文采。作者还在写作过程中,运用大量的定语从句,倒装句,强调句以及固定句型等使得文章的句式丰富,增加了文章的亮点色。

五、山东省

(一)2019年

【文段表达】

Write a review(评论) of the following story in about120 words. The review has to include the followingpoints.(阅读下面的故事,请根据下面的提示,写出一篇约120词的评论).

(1)The title of your review.(你撰写的评论的标题.)

(2)Your idea(s),examples and the reason(s) forunhappiness and happiness in the story.(你归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点,举例子并说明原因.)

(3)Your idea(s) ofhappiness, examples for happiness in your daily life.(归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点,并举例说明.)

(4)Your conclusion about happiness.(关于幸福的结论.)

(5)The words you may use.(你可能用到的词) be satisfiedwith(对……满意) desire n.欲望contentment 知足 the key(关键) tohappiness.

A long time ago, in a rich and beautiful country, there lived an unhappy king. He slept badlyand didn't feel like eating. He often cried for noreason. This made the queen and his people worried. So they called a doctor to examine him.Buthe found nothing wrong with his body.He said what theking needed was the shirt of a happy person to wear.Thatwould make him happy.

The prime minister was called to the palace. But when they explained the king'ssituation to him, he said,"AlthoughI have a lot of power, it doesn't make me happy. I'm always worried about losing my power."

Then the king's banker came to say, I'm afraid I'm not happy either. I have a lot of wealth, but I'm alwaysworried about losing money.

Someone tries to steal my money. Next, thepalace singer was called to say, "I'm famous butI'm not happy because I'm worried about being followed by others. I can't be free."

Finally, the top general was told to go out to find a happy man. He searched and searched but couldn't find anyone. Everyone seemed to have their own problems,and no one was truly happy. Just as he wanted to giveup. he saw a poor man on the street. He was eating with his hands and singing happily to himself. The general went to him and said,"Whatmakes you so happy?You have no power, money, or fame."The man said,"I have everything I want. and I don't want what I can't have. So I'mhappy, and my song comes from the happiness in my heart. ""Can you give your shirt to me,I need it, "said the general."What shirt?I don' t have any shirts."answered the man.

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【考题解析】

2019年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求根据题目中的小故事写一篇评论,话题涉及现代人们对幸福的理解,体现了关注学生的成长,教育学生树立正确的价值观,符合社会主义价值观的要求,属于当今社会的热点话题之一。本文要求根据小故事写出评论,要求学生能够发表自己的观点,难度要求较高。学生在写作时要阅读所给材料。

【满分范文】

My Thoughts aboutHappiness

Power, wealth, and fame can't always makepeople happy. For example, the rich people were unhappy, because they areafraid of losing money, while the poor people was truly happy because he wassatisfied with what he could have.

What can always make me happy?Happiness is always in my heart andis easy to find if I pay more attention to what I have. For instance, enjoyingthe beautiful sunshine after a cloudy day, getting a glass of water from motherwhen I am studying, getting help from my friends when I am in trouble and soon. These are the moments when I am happy.

All in all, don't think about what you can'thave. Contentment is the key to happiness.

【名师点评】

这是一篇要求写评论的文章,根据下面的故事中的相关信息写出一篇约120词的评论。所提供的材料中列举了撰写的评论的标题。

主要从:(1)归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点,举例子并说明原因。(2)归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点,并举例说明;(3)关于幸福的结论。这几个方面去介绍。时态为一般过去时,人称为第一人称。注意评论中必须包含材料上的故事情节,并适当发挥。写作时,避免使用汉语式的英语,尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确,表达要符合英语习惯,注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词,注意上下文联系紧密,符合逻辑关系,表达具有条理性。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇优秀的作文,短文作者根据题目要求,紧扣主题,根据事实写出自己感受.灵活运用平时学习的句子和句型,写出了自己对幸福的理解。短文有以下几个优点:首先文章内容完整,结构清晰,符合题目要求。其次本文运用了一些亮点句型,为文章提分不少。(1)高分句型一 For example,the rich people were unhappy,because they are afraid of losing money, while the poor people was truly happybecause he was satisfied with what he could have.例如,富人不快乐,因为他们害怕失去钱,而穷人真正快乐是因为他对自己所拥有的感到满足。句子because they are afraid of losing money是由because引导的原因状语从句。

(2)高分句型二 All in all, don’t think about what you can't have. 总之,不要想你不能拥有的东西。句子what you can't have.作think about的宾语。

(二)2018年

【文段表达】

Use the followinginformation to write a paragraph about bees.

●Be as busylearning all their subjects as bees are busy gathering honey

●They havesharp stings(刺) to harm them and protect themselves.

●Wise andbusy

●No gains

●Does itsown work

●Driven fromthe hive to be stopped from eating the honey before winter comes

●Jointogether to build cells of wax(蜡质房子) for their honey

●How busythey are always

●Don't work

●That havesix sides and are all of one shape and size

●A housecalled a hive

●One queen

Bees live in… Theyare… There is… in each hive. They all… Each bee… They build cells… It’spleasant to see… But drones… They are… Children shouldn’t touch bees… No pains…Shouldn’t children…

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【考题解析】

2018年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求学生介绍蜜蜂。文体为说明文。今年作文的主题从以往的关注人文转至关注自然,属于一个全新的视角,但本文已给出大量材料,学生只需认真阅读所给材料,有条理地去组织自己的语言。本文难度较低。介绍蜜蜂时应注意语言表达清楚。

【满分范文】

Bees live in ahouse called a hive. They are wise and busy. There is one queen in each hive.They all join together to build cells of wax(蜡质房子) for their honey. Each bee does its own work. Theybuild cells that have six sides and are all of one shape and size. It'spleasant to see how busy they are always, But drones don't work. They aredriven from the hive to be stopped from eating the honey before winter comes.Children shouldn't touch bees because they have sharp stings(刺) to harm them and protect themselves. No pains, no gains. Shouldn'tchildren be as busy learning all their subjects as bees are busy gatheringhoney?

【名师点评】

2018年山东枣庄中考作文为材料作文,本文主要描述蜜蜂的相关情况,是一篇说明文。题目中已经给出了大量的信息,考生只需挑选其中的一些,然后有机地组合起来即可。在写作时要注意不要完全按照题目给出信息的顺序进行描写,要按照正常介绍事物的顺序来写作,比如先介绍属性,然后是外表,接着是生活习性等。本文描述客观事实,所以多使用一般现在时。注意叙述有条理,多用关联词,使行文连贯、通顺。这篇作文的词数为80-100,不得出现考生和相关人物的真实校名和姓名。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇优秀的作文。本文能根据题目中材料,语言简洁准确,行文连贯,不遗漏要点。本文体裁为说明文。分为三段式来介绍蜂巢。在文章的开头:引出介绍的事物,蜜蜂是益虫(a kind of beneficial insects)。第二段为文章的重点,具体描写了蜜蜂的情况。1.聪明、勤劳的动物(wise and busy);2.做事井井有条(in good order and well arranged);3.建造蜂巢(build cells of wax);结尾:联系实际要向蜜蜂学习,一分耕耘一分收获(no pains, no gains)。文章语言表达要符合英语习惯,准确运用一般现在时。

(三)2017年

【文段表达】

Write a review ofthe following story in about 90 words. The review has to include the followingpoints:

1. The name ofyour review.

2. The idea(s) ofyour review.

3. The reason(s)for your idea(s).

4. Something youdecide after you consider all the information in the story.

“Cock-a-doodle-doo!” cried the cock(公鸡). He stood in the farm-yard and cried aloud, so that all peoplemight hear him. “Cock-a-diidke-doo! How useful I am,for I always get up first. And I cry about as soon as the sun rises to make allpeople in the house wake.”

“Cluck!Cluck! Cluck!”cried the hen from the yard. She waswalking about with three pretty little chickens, and trying to find some foodfor them. “Cluck! Cluck! Cluck! I’m more useful than you. Almost every day I lay a nice fresh egg formy master’s (男主人)breakfast.Then think how useful I am to my mistress(女主人). Howmany nice things does she make with my eggs for the children? She could not geton well without eggs.”

【考题解析】

2017年山东枣庄英语中考作文,要求写一篇评论。材料已给出,这就要求学生能认真阅读所给材料,确定作文的题目、主旨以及原因,考察学生对语言的实际应用能力和思想深度难度较高。本文通过小故事要求学生能对生活中的一些现象进行正确的分析,树立正确的人生观、价值观。

【满分范文】

The Use of theCock and the hen

The cock is useful. He always gets up firstand cries,“Cock-a-diidke-doo!”to wake all people in the house up. The hen isuseful too.On the one hand,she tries to find food for pretty little chickens;onthe other hand,she lays a nice fresh egg for her master’s breakfast.Hermistress makes many things with her eggs for the children.She could get on wellwith eggs.

In a word,both the cock and the hen areuseful.It is wrong of them to see their own use only instead of seeing eachother’s use.

【名师点评】

本文要求写一篇评论,也是一篇材料作文,给出了一个小故事。我们要根据提示用自己的语言对公鸡和母鸡的行为做出评价,并要写出自己这样评价的理由。要注意所写的句子符合英语表达习惯,不要遗漏要点,语言准确。注意本文的时态为一般现在时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词,注意上下文联系紧密,符合逻辑关系,表达具有条理性。

【写作亮点】

这篇是一篇优秀的作文,短文语句通顺,表达准确。本文能根据材料确定作文的题目,结构完整,短文中用了一些复杂句式及短语如:get up起床;wake sb. up把某人叫醒;try to do sth,努力做某事;find food找到食物;it is+形容词+介词(of/for)+todo sth. 做某事对某人来说是怎样的;此外还用了一些过渡句或短语,如:On the one hand,on the other hand, In a word等,使句子上下文过渡自然。

六、江苏卷

(一)2019年

【文段表达】

减负之后,同学们有了更多的课余时间。某校英语角就“如何让课余生活更有意义?”展开了讨论,大家各抒己见。请你根据下图提示,以“How To Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?”为题,用英语写一篇短文。

注意:(1) 短文应包括所给内容要点,可适当发挥,使文章连贯;

(2) 词数90左右,短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;

(3) 短文中不得出现考生的真实姓名、校名等信息;

(4) 参考词汇:提升素养promote literacy。

How to Make OurSpare Time More Meaningful?

Nowadays, westudents have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our sparetime more meaningful?

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【考题解析】

2019年连云港中考英语作文为做法类,与2014年江苏连云港中考英语作文“How to deal with exams stress?”类别相同。从近年英语作文命题来看,做法类的作文主要是针对某要求提出具体行动做法。本文属于材料作文,要表达如何让课外生活更有意义,因此文体为说明文。作文的主题是“如何让课外生活更有意义?”,话题贴近学生生活,关注学生的人文素养,容易与学生产生共鸣,难度适中,根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑,可适当增加内容。

【满分范文】

How to Make OurSpare Time More Meaningful?

Nowadays we students have much more sparetime than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?

My schoolmates give the followingsuggestions. First, it's good to help our parents do some housework to show ourlove for them. Second, we will know more about the world by reading. Third, itis a good chance for us to get close to nature and relax ourselves.

In my opinion, we can do some sports to makeus stronger and healthier. What's more,we can take an active part in some social activities as volunteers to helpthose in need.

In a word, let's make full use of our sparetime and promote our literacy.

【名师点评】

2019连云港中考英语作文要求提出“如何让课余生活更有意义?”的做法,可分四段来写,第一段表明观点,第二段和第三段分别阐述别人提出的做法和自己的建议,第四段总结全文。写作时主要使用一般现在时,以第一人称为主。根据题目中的图表结构提示可知,这篇作文的主要做法有五点:其中已给出三点即“帮助父母表达爱心;阅读书籍了解世界,亲近自然放松自己”,另外两点具体的建议要求学生自己发挥,因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。最后需要总结全文,点明主旨,提升文化素养。在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词,使句子衔接自然。

写完之后可以进行修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外,还要检查语法结构是否合理,有无重复、啰嗦的语言,大小写是否正确,格式是否正确,词数是否符合要求等。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇优秀的作文,很好地完成了试题规定的任务,语言表达符合英语习惯,准确运用时态、主谓一致等,结构清晰,第一段开门见山提出课余时间较多,如何让课余生活更有意义?第二段介绍了同学们给出三点建议,运用副词first,second,third,使得层次清楚,结构完整。第三段表达自己的两点建议,多做运动和参加志愿者活动。第四段,结尾总结全文,升华主题,要充分利用课余时间,提高人文素养。本文使用一些亮点词句,如a good chance to do, get close to, in my opinion, what’s more, take an active part in, in a word, make full use of, sparetime以及“比较级and比较级”等,增强逻辑关系,增加上下文意思连贯,用词准确,句子通顺,行文连贯。

(二)2018年

【文段表达】

积极锻炼是非常重要的,为此,某英文报开展了一次关于初中生段炼情况的调查活动.请你根据下列图表和相关文字提示,以"Exercising is important!"为题,用英语写一篇短文.

注意:(1)短文应包括所给内容要点,可适当发挥,使文章连贯;

(2)词数90左右,短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;

(3)短文中不得提及考生所在学校及自己的姓名等信息.

(4)参考词汇:敏锐的sharp

Exercising isimportant!

Recently,we havedone a survey about students' exercising.

【考题解析】

2018年连云港中考英语作文为图表作文,话题是“Exercising isimportant!”。今年中考英语作文题目延续了以往的以人为本,关注学生健康成长。现在学生锻炼的时间比较少,这次作文反映了社会热点问题,呼吁学生积极锻炼。本文是图表类作文,要求学生能仔细观察图表并对于如何开展锻炼提出自己的建议,难度较高。

【满分范文】

Exercising isimportant!

Recently,we have done a survey about students’ exercising. According to thesurvey, 32% of the students spend over one hour every day doing exercise, while68% of them spend less than one hour.The reasons are as follows:Firstly, 46% of them have too much homework, so they have no time todo exercise. Secondly, 29% of them are not good at exercise. Thirdly, 25% ofthem are not interested in it.

As we all know, exercising is good for ourhealth, which keeps our minds sharp and makes us confident and happy.

In my opinion, we should keep a balancebetween our study and exercising. Besides, we should develop a good habit ofdoing exercise. 

【名师点评】

这是一篇图表作文,图标类作文的文体通常为议论文、应用文和说明文。根据图标内容提示可知本文调查了初中生的锻炼情况,并要求提出自己的建议,故文体为议论文。在写作前一定要认真审题。

在写作时要做到以下几点:(1)要认真解读图表,切勿流漏重要信息数据信息和细节提示,不必每个数据都涉及,但重要数据必须提到。 (2)对图表中的内容分析、数据说明定要简明提要,尽量使用简单句,因为复杂的句式往往起不到清晰表达的效果,这有悖于图表作文的考查目的。(3)结论性的表达要按部就班地从图表信息分析或数据归纳而来,这样才能使语言有说服力,切忌主观判断,更不能主观臆造,避免“I think/believe....."等类似句式。(4)结合实际生活,提出自己的建议。同时还应该注意,书写要规范,包括大小写、标点符号等。写作之后要认真检査,改正错误。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇优秀的作文,本文能认真分析图表数据,要点齐全,结构清晰,并能适当发挥给出自己的建议。本文采用第一人称,时态为一般现在时。能根据常用的图表作文的三段式结构展开写作,思路清晰,结构完整。第一段分析图表的数据变化反映出来的问题,简要概括图标所揭示的信息,“ 32%的学生每天锻炼少于1小时,68%的学生多于1小时。According to thesurvey, 32% of the students spend over one hour every day doing exercise, while68% of them spend less than one hour.”接着根据第二个图表,分析了背后的三点原因“The reasons are as follows...”作者运用Firstly,Secondly,Thirdly来表明原因,条理清楚。第二段强调了锻炼的意义,有益身体健康;保持思维敏锐;变得自信快乐。能根据要点提示用英文描述,句式运用了which引导的非限定性定语从句,表达准确。第三段锻炼的两个建议。“In my opinion, we should...Beside...”句式简洁,表达清晰。

(三)2017年

【文段表达】

青少年是祖国的未来,也是城市的名片.在创建全国文明城市的过程中,我市举办了"美德少年"评选活动.假如你是"美德少年"的争创者,请根据下列表格中的提示,以"Be a virtue teenager,build a civilizedcity"为题,用英语写一份倡议书,号召大家积极争做"美德少年",为港城添彩.

主题

做"美德少年",创文明城市

内容

待人方面:尊老爱幼,友好互助

言谈方面:语言文明,耐心倾听

出行方面:遵守交规,主动礼让

你的观点

联系实际,谈谈你的观点(至少两点)

注意:90词左右.短文标题和开头已给出,不计入总词数.

文中不得提及有关考生的个人的身份的任何信息,如:校名,人名等.

Be a virtueteenager, build a civilized city

Being a teenager of Lianyungang, what shouldwe do to help build a civilized city?

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【考题解析】

2017年连云港中考英语作文(Be a virtue teenager,build a civilived city)是以“做‘美德少年’,创文明城市”为主题的倡议书,号召大家积极争做“美德少年”,为港城添彩。选材贴近生活,体现人文性,注重学生道德素养,关注学生身心健康,要求学生要有责任感,为城市发展做出贡献,具有时代感。本文要求学生能围绕表格中提示信息,转换成英语进行表达,并根据自己的实际适当发挥,难度一般。

满分范文

Be a virtueteenager, build a civilized city

Being a teenager of Lianyungang, what shouldwe do to help build a civilized city?

Firstly, when in public places, we shouldrespect the elderly and take care of the young. We should also be friendly andhelpful to others. Secondly, when having a conversation, we should speakpolitely and be patient enough to listen; Thirdly, when on the road, we shouldobey the traffic rules and give seats when necessary.

As s junior students, I think it's our dutyto do as the above. At the same time, we should try our best to study hard andobey all the school rules. In this way, we can be a virtue teenager and help tobuild our city into a civilized one. I hope everyone will join us and try to bea virtue teenager.

【名师点评】

这是一篇图表作文,文体为议论文,给出了一些汉语提示内容。这就要求学生能根据提示用正确的英语把要点表达出来,并适当发挥想象。写作前要认真阅读所给的汉语提示,弄清这个题目要表达的内容,不要遗漏要点。对所给信息进行整理,按照自己的写作思路使其条理清楚。根据提示内容可知本文主要是用一般现在时来写。另外在写作过程中,要确保语言精炼,不要按照信息点去逐句翻译。用自己熟悉的短语和句型去体现要点,掌握好文章的长度,注意字数要求为90词左右。最后要根据要求联系实际,写出自己的观点,要符合文章主旨,不要脱离主题,胡编乱造。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。

【写作亮点】

这是一篇比较优秀的作文,本文很好地写出了试题的内容提示,包含所有内容要点;语言表达要符合英语习惯,准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,用词准确、句子通顺、行文连贯。

首先引出下文如何建造文明港城,接着第二段详细介绍了在待人、言谈、出行三个方面的做法,运用“Firstly,Secondly,Thirdly” 三个副词,使第二段层次清楚。第三段,表明了自己的观点,“As s junior students, I think it's our duty to do as the above。创文明城市是我们的义务,体现了作为主人翁的去贡献自己的力量,从自身做起。本文采用三段式,结构清楚,其中也有很多好的短语值得学生们学习,比如take care of 照顾,be friendly to对某人友好,obey the traffic rules 遵守交通规则, give seats让座。这些短语准确地表达了题目中汉语提示内容,使文章表达清楚,语言简洁生动。

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