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（2019全国一卷书面表达）

假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括：

1．写信目的：

2．个人优势：

3．能做的事情。

注意：

1．词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．结束语已为你写好。

 

 【各档次例文及评价标准】

第五档 23分（21-25）

 I am Li Hua, a Chinese student studying in London on this summer Vacation. Knowing that a tremendous Chinese painting gallary will be held, I am writing this letter to recommend myself to be a volunteer.

 To begin with, affiliative as I am, I am absolutely convinced that I will be qualified for this role. What’s more, I have been learning Chinese painting for 7 years, which enables me to introduce these charming works to visitors professionally and systematically. Besides,what I can do also includes helping keep tourists in order, sharing my comprehension with them, teaching children to draw some paintings and so on.

 I would appreciate it if you can take my application into account. Thanks a lot.

专家组点评：

漂漂亮亮，完全完成了写作任务，整篇文章读下来毫无阻力。

首先，文章分三段，层次清晰。第一段表明身份，写作的背景与目的。第二段详细陈述自己的优点及可以为本次展览做的事情，To begin with， What’s more，Besides等承接词的使用让人读起来明明白白。第三段结尾表达客气与感谢。

然后，文章的语言准确，丰富，多变。对于时态，语态，简单句，并列举，复合句，非谓语等运用娴熟。例如， I am Li Hua, a Chinese student studying in London on this summer Vacation. 同位语，现在分词作定语。Knowing that a tremendous Chinese painting gallary will be held, I am writing this letter to recommend myself to be a volunteer. 现在分词做原因状语。 I have been learning Chinese painting for 7 years, which enables me to introduce these charming works to visitors professionally and systematically 非限制性定语从句做补充说明。what I can do also includes helping keep tourists in order, sharing my comprehension with them, teaching children to draw some paintings and so on. 主语从句。

尽管有些许错误和表述不当，但错误不严重，不影响整体理解和交际的功能。如Chinese painting gallary，表述不准确，gallary拼写错误。affiliative as I am，不太准确。

 

第四档 18分（16-20）

  I’m LiHua, a Chinese student who is studying in London during my summer vacation. Knowing that the local Painting Museum is going to organize a Chinese Painting exhibition, I”m more than delighted to recommend myself as your volunteer.

  As an exchange student from China, I am interested in Chinese painting and know a lot of information and knowledge of it, which is benefit for me to introduce my country’s working to visitors properly.

  Besides, not only can I introduce them using my knowledge, but also I can communicate with visitors freely because of my fluent English.

Hope you could give me an opportunity to be a volunteer and learn from this activity.

专家组点评：

清清楚楚，完成了写作任务，但整体读下来少量部分有一定阻力，出现个别严重错误。

优点：文章结构清晰，第一段表明身份，写作的背景与目的。第二三段详细陈述自己的优点及可以为本次展览做的事情，使用了Besides等承接词。第四段结尾表达客气与感谢。

语言的使用， I’m LiHua, a Chinese student who is studying in London during my summer vacation. 同位语，定语从句。Knowing that the local Painting Museum is going to organize a Chinese Painting exhibition, I”m more than delighted to recommend myself as your volunteer.

现在分词做原因状语。not only can I introduce them using my knowledge, but also I can communicate with visitors freely because of my fluent English.倒装句。

但在As an exchange student from China, I am interested in Chinese painting and know a lot of information and knowledge of it, which is benefit for me to introduce my country’s working to visitors properly.出现了严重语法错误  is benefit 的连用。

 

第三档 13分（11-15）

 How is everything going? I’m Li HUa . A student from China. In this summer holiday, I have some lessons in London. I’m knowing that there is going to be held a Draw Painting Of China. I’m writing to you that I want to be a volunteer.

  As is universally acknowledged, the Chinese painting has a long history and it also be known for nowadays. Be s Chinese, I’m so proud of my country. I can speak Chinese of course and other countries language like English, French, Germar or so. although I can’t speak it just like my own language, but It not influence my conversation. Besides, I’m good at Chinese history, so I can interduce the draws history and tell the visitor the story about it. If I can be a volunteer in your art museum, I can be a guide and led visitors to be known for China, and I will clean the place which I charged. I hope to work there very much.

专家组点评：

马马虎虎，基本完成了写作任务，但读下来阻力较大，语言运用不熟练错误较多，甚至严重错误数量较多。

本篇文章分两段，层次比较清晰，简单句的使用较多复合句和高级语法使用较少或者使用不准确。好句子，As is universally acknowledged, the Chinese painting has a long history ，其他正确句子其本都是简单句例如How is everything going? I’m Li HUa .In this summer holiday, I have some lessons in London. I’m so proud of my country.I can speak Chinese of course. I’m good at Chinese history.等。 严重错误多A student from China.there is going to be held a Draw Painting Of China. it also be known. It not influence my conversation.等。普通错误包括大小写的使用，词汇的拼写等都比较多，如I’m Li HUa .Germar等

 

第二档 8分（6-10）

I’m so glad that I could write this letter for become a volunteer about The Chinese Paint exhibition.

Because I’m a Chinese that I can introduct the paint to visitor in Chinese. And I’m a student, I have a lot of time in Summer. I also know more about Chinese paint I can give the useful skills to customer how to look the paint is good or bad.

I wish I can become a Chinese teacher. that I could teach another volunteer to learn Chinese.

If I can be a volunteer, I think I will feel very honor.

 

专家组点评：

糊里糊涂，未恰当完成试题规定的任务。整体阅读下来阻力很大，错误很多，隔三差五有个别对的句子。例如本篇文章的正确句子有I’m so glad that，Because I’m a Chinese， I’m a student, I also know more about Chinese paint，等。

 

第一档 3分（1-5）

Hearing that art museum are hold on Chinese draw show. I’m more than delighted to join in play a part in volunteer

I writing to letter want to as a volunteer server many people, I come to London study English in unversite. I suitble an volunteer because I can drawa Chinese painting, but I’m Chinese people, so I knowing that Chinese draw characteristic. I know Chinese art characteristic.

I can do the thing is speak to English local people the Chinese draw characteristic.

I hope that join in the volunteer in local art museum.

专家点评：

一塌糊涂，完全没有完成写作任务。只有单词没有语法，结构，句子。

 

 

 

 

 

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